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Posted 2009-10-06, 01:00 AM
in reply to Grav's post starting "This must have taken a lot of work...."
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I like it! So, this is from who's point of view, an on-looker? Or the man who's heart she broke? It sounds like it could be both...
Also, just makin' sure I got this right... It's about a couple who decide to make love for the first time, and he finds out she isn't a virgin? Or he finds out she is cheating on him during that time... And then, he leaves her and basically tries to rebuild or mend his heart as she continues on seemingly unaffected. Then [The Narrator] goes on to assume the other guy doesn't know, (and I'm assuming the reader is meant to assume he doesn't... but I personally never believe that...) but he feels bad for him, for when he finds out he may love this woman, she isn't as faithful as she tries to appear, and he hopes that he sees through her deception, thus leaving the 3 broken hearts... I don't know why her brother had to die, but yeah, screw that bastage too! LOL! But then it ends with him saying that she may still be saved? somehow?
Yeah... maybe I read it wrong... it IS about midnight... But it sounds like it was written long ago. Like, the use of God in it makes it seem like it was written when God actually meant something to people... Not that he doesn't now-adays, he just doesn't have the same presence that he used to... x_x I'm not tryin' to diss the religion or nothing, so if it sounds like that, sorry...
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