As you probably know, and I don't mean to sound like a complete jackass, but I think it's kinda stupid. I understand what you're trying to do, but it's a silly form of art if that's what it's mean to be. If you posted it here for feedback, though, I'd say at the end change "bodz" and "bcuz" which sounds less like a kid, and more like internet slang from an AOL chatroom