raven5540
2003-09-27, 04:00 AM
Ok ime a newbie and this isthe story for the game ime making (ime a fair way into it) i would apriciate if you wold give me feedback (may have spelling errors). Its not finnished so ill post more later.Well here it is.
Crystal Quest
(Starting words flashes when the player clicks new game)
Where there is ying there is yang, where there is good there is evil, where thee is darkness there is light, for where there is light there is darkness, forever together for you cant have one without the other, bound to eternal struggle
There are many worlds with many skies but they all have one thing in common, they all share the same destiny
(Story)
In the ancient history of Evalon two clans were constantly at war with each other. This all changed when some peace-seeking miners discovered an enormous crystal with awesome power. The peace-seeking miners could not keep the secret for long and the two clans discovered the crystal. Warfare raged vilently until the crystal couldnt hold the strain much longer. It shattered in to many, many pieces. This triggered something in the peoples minds as the no longer wished for war. This brought peace to all of Evalon. The many smaller crystals still held great power and they were given evenly out to all the towns and villages of Evalon. Over the years the people became more and more dependant on the crystals as they could supply them with power, light, warmth and slight control over the elements. But this peace could only last so long as an evil force was growing, and they planned to seize the crystals to add to their power. The time come when the force attacked a village. This army was far numerous than any other ever seen before. The people held a ceremony in order to strengthen the crystals and to do this they had to bring the pieces together. The army was driven back by the power of the crystals and their leader (no one knows his name) was slain. His last words were The thing that is your greatest strength is also your greatest weakness for nothing lasts forever, not even the crystals that you rely so much upon. But of course the people overjoyed by their victory paid no heed to his words.
Many seasons past until eventually the light of the crystals began to fade, and the words of the ancient army leader became to reawake in the peoples minds. So they decided to perform the ancient ceremony that they had use in ages past in hope in would brighten the crystals to there former glory.
(This is wear it switches to the main story/character)
At this point the main characters sister walks in his room and tells him the ceremony has started so he goes out and the ceremony begins (they didnt gather all the crystals). It shows people all dressed the same (ceremonial outfits) going in a circle around a platform with crystals on it (sister says how exited she is and your mom walks on the scene). Lightning strikes, and then the remainder of the ancient evil army attacks. (for they did not know it but the ceremony weakens the crystals for a moment and they didnt gather all the crystals). The raid was quick and they took captives/hostages. (Among them, the main characters sister and mum). The village is now partly ruins. When the main character finds out about his family he gets some supplies, a weapon and embarks upon his journey to save his sister, mother (and also to ensure the safety of the people) a find something to replace/re-power the crystals. He says to anyone wanting to come with him that he will go alone and wont endanger anyone else. Unknown to him his little brother follows him into the great peril that awaits them.
(Plot)
The main story is that the people relied on the crystals too much, forgetting the ways of the past and there power is fading (for like the army leader says nothing last forever). The hostages is for the heroes/main characters motivation.
(For many people that have made games an rpg maker just have the hero step up for no reason whatsoever sand save the world, well yea right as if he would do that with no motivation/reason).
And a bit into the story you have to look for the pages ripped out of a book that are scattered around the world. The book was a persons diary that had been researching the crystals his whole life. In another part you have to travel to other continents in search of your sister, mother and a replacement/replenisher for the crystals.
(Character profiles)
Main Character (Raven)
Age 18, brown hair/eyes, male. The main character is very talented and strong, looked up to by many children in the village. He has been getting lessons by a martial arts master and the villages wise women (healing and magic person). All ways keen to learn he studies (and exercises) a lot. He has always been peaceful, like a strong silent dreamer. Can only partly remember his father. (No one knows what happened to him) In battle (an all rounder. Although it seems he has no weakness he cannot bring himself to slay another creature.
After all that has happened my brother has changed. I see it in his eyes. Now he is less peaceful and more, how should I put it, keen on revenge quote by his brother.(Kyle)
Main characters brother (Kyle)
Age 10. He is forever looking up at his brother for he is his idle. He wants to be just like him and also thinks of him like a father as well for he was to young to remember his. He followed his brother in order to prove himself for he loves his brother but is sick of being treated like a kid. He has always been more restless and less peaceful than his brother and is keen to have revenge on his sisters/mothers capturers. At the start of the game uses every day objects as weapon. Is very, very special as is found out later in the game.
He tries to hard, if he just relaxed more he would do better. Ah if only he had more self-confidence quote by the main character. (Raven)
Ray
Age 17, female blond hair blue eyes. She is very short tempered and has a dont mess with me bitch attitude. Underneath all that she is very passionate. She can use magic like flee, slow, haste, and ability ups. Speed is her specialty. She goes along because she has a crush on Raven who saved her from a monster and she also thinks she owes him
She is cute but boy what a hot head, her temper has a short fuse but I guess its just her hiding her real feelings quote by the main character. (Raven)
Glimli
Age? Species Dwarf. Male. Glimli is an unusual dwarf being taller than usual. He is very stubborn and when something gets set in his mind its nearly impossible to change it. He may not be the smartest in the party but he makes up for it with brute strength. He uses two hands to hold his preferred weapon (the axe) witch makes him unable to hold a shield but gives him more strength/attack. He goes along with the party for Revenge (revenge is fairly common in this game.
Hmm I wonder if he even has a brain or just a hollow shell, its hard to tell because he rarely talks quote by Ray
More to come
This work is copywrite and any use of it without my permission is a violation of the law (this isnt fake) for more information on the copywrite terms pm me.
Plz tell me what you think
Crystal Quest
(Starting words flashes when the player clicks new game)
Where there is ying there is yang, where there is good there is evil, where thee is darkness there is light, for where there is light there is darkness, forever together for you cant have one without the other, bound to eternal struggle
There are many worlds with many skies but they all have one thing in common, they all share the same destiny
(Story)
In the ancient history of Evalon two clans were constantly at war with each other. This all changed when some peace-seeking miners discovered an enormous crystal with awesome power. The peace-seeking miners could not keep the secret for long and the two clans discovered the crystal. Warfare raged vilently until the crystal couldnt hold the strain much longer. It shattered in to many, many pieces. This triggered something in the peoples minds as the no longer wished for war. This brought peace to all of Evalon. The many smaller crystals still held great power and they were given evenly out to all the towns and villages of Evalon. Over the years the people became more and more dependant on the crystals as they could supply them with power, light, warmth and slight control over the elements. But this peace could only last so long as an evil force was growing, and they planned to seize the crystals to add to their power. The time come when the force attacked a village. This army was far numerous than any other ever seen before. The people held a ceremony in order to strengthen the crystals and to do this they had to bring the pieces together. The army was driven back by the power of the crystals and their leader (no one knows his name) was slain. His last words were The thing that is your greatest strength is also your greatest weakness for nothing lasts forever, not even the crystals that you rely so much upon. But of course the people overjoyed by their victory paid no heed to his words.
Many seasons past until eventually the light of the crystals began to fade, and the words of the ancient army leader became to reawake in the peoples minds. So they decided to perform the ancient ceremony that they had use in ages past in hope in would brighten the crystals to there former glory.
(This is wear it switches to the main story/character)
At this point the main characters sister walks in his room and tells him the ceremony has started so he goes out and the ceremony begins (they didnt gather all the crystals). It shows people all dressed the same (ceremonial outfits) going in a circle around a platform with crystals on it (sister says how exited she is and your mom walks on the scene). Lightning strikes, and then the remainder of the ancient evil army attacks. (for they did not know it but the ceremony weakens the crystals for a moment and they didnt gather all the crystals). The raid was quick and they took captives/hostages. (Among them, the main characters sister and mum). The village is now partly ruins. When the main character finds out about his family he gets some supplies, a weapon and embarks upon his journey to save his sister, mother (and also to ensure the safety of the people) a find something to replace/re-power the crystals. He says to anyone wanting to come with him that he will go alone and wont endanger anyone else. Unknown to him his little brother follows him into the great peril that awaits them.
(Plot)
The main story is that the people relied on the crystals too much, forgetting the ways of the past and there power is fading (for like the army leader says nothing last forever). The hostages is for the heroes/main characters motivation.
(For many people that have made games an rpg maker just have the hero step up for no reason whatsoever sand save the world, well yea right as if he would do that with no motivation/reason).
And a bit into the story you have to look for the pages ripped out of a book that are scattered around the world. The book was a persons diary that had been researching the crystals his whole life. In another part you have to travel to other continents in search of your sister, mother and a replacement/replenisher for the crystals.
(Character profiles)
Main Character (Raven)
Age 18, brown hair/eyes, male. The main character is very talented and strong, looked up to by many children in the village. He has been getting lessons by a martial arts master and the villages wise women (healing and magic person). All ways keen to learn he studies (and exercises) a lot. He has always been peaceful, like a strong silent dreamer. Can only partly remember his father. (No one knows what happened to him) In battle (an all rounder. Although it seems he has no weakness he cannot bring himself to slay another creature.
After all that has happened my brother has changed. I see it in his eyes. Now he is less peaceful and more, how should I put it, keen on revenge quote by his brother.(Kyle)
Main characters brother (Kyle)
Age 10. He is forever looking up at his brother for he is his idle. He wants to be just like him and also thinks of him like a father as well for he was to young to remember his. He followed his brother in order to prove himself for he loves his brother but is sick of being treated like a kid. He has always been more restless and less peaceful than his brother and is keen to have revenge on his sisters/mothers capturers. At the start of the game uses every day objects as weapon. Is very, very special as is found out later in the game.
He tries to hard, if he just relaxed more he would do better. Ah if only he had more self-confidence quote by the main character. (Raven)
Ray
Age 17, female blond hair blue eyes. She is very short tempered and has a dont mess with me bitch attitude. Underneath all that she is very passionate. She can use magic like flee, slow, haste, and ability ups. Speed is her specialty. She goes along because she has a crush on Raven who saved her from a monster and she also thinks she owes him
She is cute but boy what a hot head, her temper has a short fuse but I guess its just her hiding her real feelings quote by the main character. (Raven)
Glimli
Age? Species Dwarf. Male. Glimli is an unusual dwarf being taller than usual. He is very stubborn and when something gets set in his mind its nearly impossible to change it. He may not be the smartest in the party but he makes up for it with brute strength. He uses two hands to hold his preferred weapon (the axe) witch makes him unable to hold a shield but gives him more strength/attack. He goes along with the party for Revenge (revenge is fairly common in this game.
Hmm I wonder if he even has a brain or just a hollow shell, its hard to tell because he rarely talks quote by Ray
More to come
This work is copywrite and any use of it without my permission is a violation of the law (this isnt fake) for more information on the copywrite terms pm me.
Plz tell me what you think